Talk:Gedling Town F.C.

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GA Review[edit]

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Nominator: Curlymanjaro (talk · contribs) 22:54, 6 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Brindille1 (talk · contribs) 18:34, 19 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]


It seems like a review of this article is long, long overdue. I'll start this review today and hopefully finish leaving comments in the coming days. Looking forward to learning more about Gedling Town F.C!

  • @Brindille1: thanks so much for picking this up and giving it such thorough attention. Brilliant suggestions so far.

History[edit]

Notts Amateur League[edit]

I don't have access to most of the sources in this section- assuming good faith here.

  • "League's Junior Cup." Is this the title of the cup? If the title is "Junior Cup", but is run by the league, then this should be "league's Junior Cup" per MOS:CAPS

The latter. Done.

  • "Prowess in the Cup was matched by League success," -> "Prowess in the cup was matched by success in the league," (There are multiple occurrences of this throughout the article).

Done.

  • "delivering on slim promotion hopes to ascend to Division One ahead of 1987–88." -> Re-word this. Should be clear that the team was the one "delivering". Who viewed the promotion hopes as slim

Done.

  • "In 1988–89" -> "In the 1988–89 season"

Done.

  • "The team were promoted as champions to the Premier Division ahead of 1989–90, their last season in amateur football." This makes it sound like 89/90 was the last season in amateur football- is that the case? Also, is "Premier Division" the full name? Should this be red-linked?

It is the case. I meant the Premier Division of the Notts Amateur League; I hope I've clarified.

  • General question- these amateur leagues aren't in the pyramid, correct? If they are, this section should note level numbers

Correct.

Central Midlands League[edit]

  • I don't see that CML D1 is at the 12th level in either source. (Same issue with the references to the 11th and 10th levels later in the paragraph)

Thanks for this; it turned out to be more intricate than I thought, so I've consigned to a note. The references actually refer to the National League System, but, to make things more understandable, I've chosen to refer to the leagues' place in the overall English football league system instead (i.e. level 7 in the NLS is equivalent to level 11 in the overall pyramid). Let me know what you think.

Done.

  • "The team led the League" -> "The team led the league"

Done.

  • "Manager Mel Oliver stood down in February and was replaced by Dave Sands and Cameron Holroyd." Were they co-managers? Or consectutive. This is unclear.

Joint-managers. Done.

  • "Finishing seventh in the League, Gedling captured the Wakefield Floodlit Cup..." -> "Gedling finished seventh in the league and captured the Wakefield Floodlit Cup"

Done.

  • "manager Dave Sands conceded the League title in January and was sacked to be replaced by Ray Sully" -> This wording is awkward, maybe something like "failed to win the league title" or "the team was eliminated from title contention"

Done.

  • "He was replaced in the new year..." Does either source mention why? It's jarring to go from the seven match unbeaten run to the replacement.

Good suggestion. Had a bust-up with his players, apparently. Done.

  • "The club was disappointed to finish in sixth." This personifies the club- maybe "The club had a disappointing sixth-place finish"?

Done.

  • "Paul Elrick and assistant Junior Glare were appointed managers for 1999–2000 as the team "lost out narrowly" 2–1 to Football League First Division side Grimsby Town in a pre-season friendly." These two events didn't happen simultaneously. These can be separate sentences.

Done.

  • "good League form" -> "good league form"

Done.